Another home demo, bit more simple than the Wicker Man, only acoustic guitar, piano, bass and drums. More pop than The Wicker Man, title may change, it's a bit rough around the edges. Wrote it last week. Let me know what you think.

http://www.savefile.com/projects/487331
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Wow, you just whipped this up last week? Very good, I like it a lot! It's catchy, but it still has a bit of that haunting sound. Yes, I would like the lyrics to this and all your stuff, btw. Big Grin

Very impressed, yet again. Smiler
Eternal Song, 'Still the Song', comes to mind, as in the lyrics 'Still the song keeps playing in my head', started singing along with the chorus of yours as I was working away, so hey you must be doing something right there !!

The most Enz influenced I reckon with the keyboards at the beginning.
Way back down came to mind first up though, think one of Tim's new songs reminded me of that too !



the lyrics please correct them. Um got a bit worried listening to them and hope you and your beloved are doing fine, but that's how I interpreted it.

Eternal Love

Haven't a clue how we ended up here.
A mister?? of weakness and too much fear
without the power of you
nor the wisdom of age.
looking expectantly for something else
this time without fantasy
the past doesn't mean anything now
we always lived tomorrow

chorus/
the suns slowly burning
dying to be reborn
our design and yearning
eternally the same

unexpected words of kindness
filter through to the present day
love loves to remain unfounded
?????
it doesn't matter what we have said
our worlds gently fading
the future's not here
our desire and yearning
eternally the same
i know i didn't fulfil your dreams
with honesty or fantasy
but i've been awake all night
waiting for you
to see

chorus
the sun's slowly burning
dying to be reborn
our desire and yearning
eternally the same.

chorus
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love the out playing of the song, so Eddie !!
In other words quite like it. Smiler



I read Kellys lyrics transcript as the song downloaded and was excited. Mate, I listened to it a dozen times hoping that something would happen. Something to like. It didn't happen Frowner
Hold those lyrics Camus, they're amazing. Sorry for the negative feed back.
It's pretty damn good for a rough sketch Smiler

This is the first time I've listened to your demos Camus, and I have to say, I like your voice and how you work with it. I like how it sounds when you go for those high ones.

There's something good in this, and if I was in your position, I'd put the money where the mouth is, and get a few more musicians in and do it.

With producer's hat on, the only constructive criticism I have is this:bThe bass at the start is very McCartney, which is something I can be guilty of myself - which is fine in places, but combined with the piano/drum style and the vocal effect, it makes it sound quite Jeff Lynne produced. The song steers itself away from that later on. I'd like to hear some more of that mandolin/guitar in the mix - I know the piano drives the song, but it could be a little lower in the mix during the verses and it would still do it. The song needs something to lift the chorus, some more instrumentation to seperate it. Some filtered string samples / horns low in the mix with some reverb with a long tail / overdriven guitar / hammond - just something.

Anyway, it's good work and I'd like to hear more Smiler
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the lyrics please correct them. Um got a bit worried listening to them and hope you and your beloved are doing fine, but that's how I interpreted it.


LOL! No it's not about us, (and we're fine btw). I didn't write the lyrics for this one, one of the very few songs I've written where I got someone else to write the lyrics.

Phillo: glad you're being honest Smiler You can't please all of the people all of the time. I have a few others that I think are more to your taste Smiler

Iarla, thanks for the comments. I agree, it does sound a bit Jeff Lynne, which is why the acoustic guitars are mixed a bit lower (I did mix them up higher but it started to sound way too much like ELO). If you have time to listen to any of the others, I'd recommend The Wicker Man. The arangement for this one is very much skeletal at the moment, and the song really needs a bridge to lift it. It's a bit too samey at the moment (which may be why you find it hard to get into Phillo?). Good suggestions there Iarla. I did play the bass line on a Hofner violin bass....

There was a bit of 'wow I really like what I've come up with, I'll let people hear it now before I finish it properly'.

Here are the lyrics with the full title, which I thought was too much of a mouthful

Eternally Changing Love of Tomorrow

Haven't a clue how we ended up here.
A mixture of weakness and too much fear
without the power of youth
nor the wisdom of age.
looking expectantly for something else
this time without fantasy
the past doesn't mean anything now
we always lived tomorrow

chorus/
the sun slowly burning
dying to be reborn
our desire and yearning
eternally the same

unexpected words of kindness
filter through to the present day
love loves to remain unfounded
impermanent
it doesn't matter what we have said
our worlds gently failing
the future's not here
our desire and yearning
eternally the same
i know i didn't fulfil your dreams
with honesty or fantasy
but i've been awake all night
waiting for you
to see

chorus
the sun slowly burning
dying to be reborn
our desire and yearning
eternally the same.

chorus
--------------------------
Growing on me more and more.
Glad you got your feedback.

I'm just not that deep with the whole lyrics thing. Gotta bop.

You guys say Beatles & ELO thought it was more Enzish, funny what we hear.

Don't procrastinate !!!!
You've got to kick start your own dreams !!
Or we???? will be here hounding you !

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Originally posted by ::iarla:::
Camus, and I have to say, I like your voice and how you work with it. I like how it sounds when you go for those high ones.


He does have a great voice doesn't he.

quote:
There was a bit of 'wow I really like what I've come up with, I'll let people hear it now before I finish it properly'.


Camus, we love hearing your work and it's "extra special" to hear a work in progress. I've listened to it again tonite a few times and I've warmed to it a little. "Samey" is what I was thinking. At 1 minute 32 seconds I'm thinking a bridge to pull me out of the loop.

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